Tuesday, January 17, 2012
Trifecta Challenge Week 10 - "Sway"
She locked in on his stare from across the island. He had his hands planted along either side, desperately gripping the countertop like a protective barrier. Leaving now was not an option. Pulsing surges of expectation coursed through their bodies, the magnetism heightening their senses. The outside world blurred around their tunneling vision. Time slowed to a fraction of their quickened breaths. Silent pleas begged. Hungry eyes answered. And in that instant, the rules of morality no longer held sway. He rushed, fingers tangling wildly through her hair, his lips clamoring for hers with bruising force. She rocked back, the momentum of their passion driving her against the cabinets. Unrestrained, insatiable, they climbed until their bodies wept with passion.
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Nice response to the prompt - Really beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteI couldn't decide, at first, if this was anger or lust. (That's a good thing, by the way - it makes me think of the Queen song "Pain Is So Close To Pleasure". ) I also love how "sway" is central to the story. Without the sentence with the rules of morality holding sway, it's impossible to tell whether these two are illicit lovers or not. But with that sentence, we know this encounter is forbidden and therefore that much more delicious.
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I find passionate love scenes very hard to write. They can easily turn out too detailed or too flowery and corny so it's embarrassing to read. This one I liked. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Satu, using fewer words to describe this scene makes it much more intriguing... leaving more to the reader's imagination.
ReplyDeleteI like short passionate scenes. They seem easier to go in and out of. (no pun intended)
ReplyDeleteThank you for linking up to this week's Trifecta Challenge. It's already been mentioned that scenes of passion can be quite difficult to write (and the poorly written ones quite difficult to read). You've done a great job of leaving the reader wanting more while still giving us enough information to piece it together. I hope you'll come back to play again next week.
ReplyDeleteWhew! I very much enjoyed this.
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