This blog is in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge, Week 11, wherein it must be inspired by and contain the word "beast". It seemed an appropriate prompt to drive the continuation of my Week 1 submission entitled "Karmic Bitchslap". So please, if you haven't had the opportunity, read Part 1 (Nov 2011) in order to fully appreciate the situation.
Spitting the last of the pooled blood from my mouth, my friable frame shook and heaved with the overwhelming effort.
I remembered now. That same silver coupe - the one with the hole kicked out of the front grill - had circled back around the corner. Still a solid block away from the crowds, my heart sputtered with fear at the sound of the accelerating engine. The combination of ridiculously high heels and a ridiculously high blood alcohol content made the cobblestone-lined street a beast to navigate. And the haze of the drugs and the early morning fog had found an unwelcome home in my panicked mind. I ran. The last thing I remember was screaming out to a God I wasn't even sure existed.
The splintering impact of my body reaffirmed my lack of faith.
You captured a sense of panic very well. That last line was chilling.
ReplyDeleteHave to agree with Tara. Left me thankful for all the times it coulda...
ReplyDeleteThat last line had the same smashing impact as I'm sure the car did.
ReplyDeleteWow. That's definitely a wallop.
ReplyDeleteI love the alliteration of "friable frame" and the image of the woman struggling to navigate the cobblestone streets in high heels, making running a slippery beast.
ReplyDeleteI'm really pleased we got the follow-up to that very post Trifecta post. Some of the descriptions here are excellent -- and I agree with jesterqueen, I loved the alliteration of 'friable frame'. Thanks for joining up and I hope you can join us for the weekend challenge going up later today.
ReplyDeleteSounds like a page from a thriller. :) Well done.
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